T3+Descriptive

__Monday 12 September__ __WALT : Describe our camp experiences by creating a diamante poem.__ S.C : Be able to write a diamante poem describing our camp experiences.

__Thursday 25 August__

__WALT- use a range of language features to write a descriptive stories.__

There once was a sophisticated hippopotamus that thought he was as smart as a monkey and is silly as a snake but he really thought that he was as fast as a tiger chasing his pray. Crack went the bank from under neath the hippopotamus when he was lazily lying on a sunny piece of grass what is now crumbled in a heap under him.

//Proof read your work. What are you trying to say? what is this story about? the first sentence doesn't make sense. You are starting to describe the scene well towards the end, maybe the story could have started from here, and gone in more depth. // //Next learning steps // //Read over your work, checking that it makes sense. // //Brainstorm ideas so you know what you want to write about. // //Use your time wisely, apply effort don't try to worry about how fast you can do it and you will be more successful in your learning. //

MY DREAM HOUSE

My dream house would be fit for a king, my house would be located on the out skirts of Rotoura.

There would be Three spa pools, Three heated pools so that I can also use them in the winter, My house will also be four stores high with three kitchens over the house for the nanny to be able to get use food, with all the bedrooms the size of a normal dinning room so there is enough for my kids to play around in, I’ll have a volcano in my the middle of my lounge that shots out diamond's in a heap and I’ll have 1000 inch T.V in my lounge so it’s like a cinema. That’s the tour of my house.