T2+Narrative+Writing

__Thursday 14th July 2011__ The Final Ride

It was one hot summers day at lake Rotoiti. Nathaniel and Kyle where beached on the couch watching T.V while begging dad (Gary) to take them out on the lake to have biscuit but no he wouldn’t let but after a while he just got so annoyed he just said yes. While lunching the boat they had a few problems the boat wouldn’t come off the tralier but the soon realize that they had gone to lake Okataina fishing so they hadn’t take the tydown straps off so the problem was fixed by the boys there dad made them. While they where cruising across the lake Kyle and Nathaniel where sorting out the biscuit untying the knots there was alot. Mean while there dad was trying to find the calmest place they could find.

“ Where are we” muted Nathaniel, “on the lake der” said dad “well it looks different’ snapped back Nathaniel. The air was very misty with smoke from a boom fire over the hill. “Well you wonted to go on the biscuit so why ant you getting into it”? yelled dad

“I yer that’s right” I thought to myself I don’t really wont to go in it now because there was something not right around here but then I realized that I made dad come out here SO what did I have to do was get into the biscuit so I done that. While we where in the biscuit floating out I realized that there was out big cut in the rope so did Kyle we both looked at each other then we started screaming “DAD STOP NOW THERE IS A CUT IN THE ROPE STOP NOW STOP NOW PLEASE” but the roar of the engine was to loud he didn't hear us. Our eyes where just locked down on the slashed rope slowly pulling at the cut as we pick up speed. SNAP!!!!! The rope snapped dad didn’t hear the rope snap even thought the sound of the snap was the sound of a 308 firing at a deer.

We where still moving at a pass until we hit our waves, slash the force of the waves made us come to a stand still. We both looked at each other and said at the same time NO why did this have to happen because we don’t have anything to call or set out a signal so why did we have to do all this. We both didn’t no where we were, even no we are all ways on the lake we couldn’t identify any land marks around.

Just wait I can remember dad saying that we where on the other side of the lake and did I hear him say something like west - bank I can’t remember my Brain has gone fuzzy with shock!! Kyle do you think by the look of those clouds it might poor down with rain and I think it might get a bit windy. Can I have your life jacket, NO I need it I'm cold too. Where is the wind taking us I DON’T NO, wait I no those land marks over there we are in umm whats it name um we are in vercos, I yer we are. Is that a boat over there, yes that is.

HELP HELP HELP HELP HELP HELP HELP, I don’t think they’ll hear you there engine will be to loud on a cam and windy day. Why they might, kyle with a very determined face. Well if I was you I wouldn’t call for help because there is a Island just over there and we are moving in that direction.

True True agreed kyle. I’m hungry grunted kyle same too and I’’m also really thirsty. Crack have I just fallen asleep no I can’t of no wait where are we what are we no we can’t be where washed up on the Island that I've never ever seen on the lake. I don’t think you are going to be walking around the Island, why there’s so many low hanging branches.Calm down now kyle calm down I know how much you are paranoid about how we might not get back home for a while and how you are missing mum and dad.

I’m hungry, I’m hungry. SHUT UP Kyle, I think I can hear a helicopter or a boat coming in this direction. Wait I can hear kids OHHH man it is just wakeboarderds having a fun time. HELP HELP HELP HELP HELP, scrammed kyle.

They wont hear you, I think we should get into the biscuit and try and get home because kyle is getting very paranoid that we are not at home because I think he is missing mum and dad because he hasn’t been on the lake with out mum and dad.

Kyle would you help me with pulling the biscuit down to the lake, ok Kyle with a happy tone to his voice. Ok what way is the wind going, North East ok that should lead us to Gisborne point, that’s home screamed kyle, How long do you think it will take us to get home maybe four hours Wow that is going to be we past dark. Yes we are finally on the lake floating towards home, it is quite windy out hear because I thought it would be not that strong breezes so we where moving much faster and now I think we will be there in two hours flat so that means we should be there just before dark.

Man I’m tired same to moaned kyle. Kyle’s asleep so no more moaning from him until we get back thank god. Yes we are finally here but we didn’t exactly end up at Gisborne point the reserve not to far from our house, I shock kyle awake, and he didn’t know why I woke him up. We got washed up in the reserve near our house that woke kyle up right when I said we got washed up in the reserve.

 Let’s go let’s go kyle said in a very happy voice, wait we have to cary the biscuit home so we don’t lose all our money. We both doodled home caring the biscuit, we knocked on the house door mum opened the door, she realised that it was us. She sprinted to wards use she gave us a big hug even thought we where socking wet.


 * __Monday 20th June__**


 * __WALT - identify personifications and use them in our writing__**

S.C. - we can identify the human trait being described we can identify the object being given a human trait we can write our own examples of personification we can explain why this helps to create a picture in our mind

__**Directions:** In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is__ __being personified and explain which human trait or action is applied to the object or idea.__ __1. The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest.__ __What is being personified? Wind __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Whispered __ __2. The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers.__ __What is being personified? Making __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Happy __ __3. As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us.__ __What is being personified? Sun __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Beat __ __4. Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic.__ __What is being personified? Time __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Crawled __ __5. The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.__ __What is being personified? Chainsaw __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Sang __ __6. When Monica walked through the shoe store, each shiny pair of high heels called out to her.__ __What is being personified? Heels __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Called __ __7. When the patriots defeated the redcoat army, freedom rang across the fruited plains.__ __What is being personified? Freedom __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Rang __ __8. As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly.__ __What is being personified? Just __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Walked __ __9. Kelly was so happy that Tom and she were moving in together, but when she walked into her new residence, she dropped her suitcase. She had never seen the inside of the house which Tom’s grandmother had given them, and though she was grateful to receive such a nice gift, the ugly yellow wallpaper in the kitchen screamed at her. She knew she would have a lot of work to do to make her new house livable.__ __What is being personified? Kitchen __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Screamed __ __10. William knew that he shouldn’t have eaten the last cookie out of the cookie jar. He knew that his father loved to eat chocolate chip cookies after work, but William ate the last one anyway. Now as he waited for his father to come home, guilt poked and chewed at William. As delicious as the cookie was, William now wished that he had never opened that cookie jar.__ __What is being personified? Guilt __ __Which human trait or quality is given? Pkoed and Chewed __
 * Personification Worksheet**
 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.
 * Name: _**

__being personified and explain which human trait or action is applied to the object or idea.__ __1. The sad waters of the icy wasteland streamed through barren landscape.__ __2. As Shelia walked home from school, the wind gripped her in its frigid fingertips.__ __3. Alan found that his wife had left him, and he felt that joy would never visit his home again.__ __4. The engine hacked and coughed as Kevin turned the key, but the old car wouldn’t start.__ __5. Though Dante tried to live a pious life and be a good father, the streets called to him at night.__
 * Personification Worksheet 2**
 * Personification:** a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.
 * Name: _____** __**Directions:** In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is__

__What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __6. The night was calm and still as crickets chirped and owls hooted under the light of the moon.__ __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __7. Though it’s been said that “Diamonds are a girl’s best friend,” some girls prefer chocolate.__ __8. Little Vito was attempting to sneak out of his parent’s house to cause trouble late at night. He was tiptoeing across the kitchen floor toward the backdoor the creaky floor boards and his squeaky shoes told his parents he was leaving. Big Vito was none too pleased with little Vito.__ __9. Gina was the most beautiful girl in the whole town. Her eyes were a blanket of stars. Her teeth shined like fresh porcelain tiles. Her long vivacious hair enjoyed many beautiful adventures as it traveled down the course of her shoulder blades. But the true source of her beauty was her personality: Gina made the world a better place by being a good person.__ __10. Victor was walking home from his friend Paco’s house late at night when he heard a tree branch breaking deep in the forest. His heart beat rapidly as he wondered what could have made that noise. Was it an animal? Was it a man? Was it something else? Victor knew that the forest would keep its many secrets as he would not be investigating tonight. Victor ran all the way home.__ __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given? __What is being personified?__ _ Which human trait or quality is given?

__Tuesday 14 June__ __WALT - Use our senses to help describe in our writing__ S.C. SEE - My marshmallow is the colour of a creamy roof of a house. The size of my marshmallow is like a small ant running around on fire. The marshmallow looks like a light dusting of snow on a mountain.

Smell - My marshmallow smells like a freshly picked strawberry cut in half with a dusting of sweet icing sugar.

Touch - My marshmallow feels like a hilly mountain with a drizzling of flour.

Tastes - My marshmallow taste’s like icy cold ice cream melting in your mouth.

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__Thursday 9 May__ WALT: Identify and use alliteration in our writing b Bob bounces balls on his small belly while eating blue jelly while its yummy. c Chontelle plays with her computer so long it cooks her a cookie. d Dallas bounces on his big belly while he is hungry. f g h j k l m Miss Crone walks the netball court while her flat mate eats all of her easter eggs over the netball court. n Nathaniel nips his nuckles while while he's waiting for nappies from lovely his nanny. p q r Rory races his racing car while digging up a racing track. s Sam suck's rotten socks because be has no snaks t Talyah tapes tap shoes on the tape while she is try to un tape her feet. v w x y z

__**Wednesday 8th June**__

__**WALT - identify similes and metaphors**__

S.C. - We can identify the similes which use 'as' We can identify the similes which use 'like' We can identify metaphors We can explain what the similes and metaphors mean/are telling us about what we are reading

//Metaphors// are a way to compare to by saying that one thing is another thing. For example, we say somebody is a //fool//. In the past in Europe, a fool was a person who entertained the king or queen by doing silly things. The fool was a kind of clown. He often did crazy or stupid things to make people laugh. So when we call somebody a fool we really mean that he or she is doing something silly or stupid. We don’t really mean that they are somebody who entertains the king or queen. We are using a metaphor. What do we mean when we say these things: When we //say someone is a pig// we really mean that. They eat messy. √ When we //call someone an angel// we really mean that. They are our darling. √ If we //say someone is a giant// we really mean that. They are really tall.√ When //we call a man an ogre or a woman a witch// we really mean. The are just plane horrible.√ When somebody plays cards and //we call them a shark//, we really mean that. They are very good at card's.√ If we say that //somebody is a volcano ready to explode//, we really mean that. That they are very angry and short tempered.√ When we say somebody is //bright// we mean that. They have a good brain.√

Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could say that //Dan is a giant//. Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is: tall - He is a giant.√ kind - She is an angel.√ fast - Miss marsden is very fast.√ slow - Jono is very.√ smart - Josh is very smart.√ fat - He is very fat.√ sneaky - Nathaniel is very sneaky.√ angry - She is very angry.√ beautiful - She's beautiful.√ ugly - Sam f is very ugly. stubborn - Elly is very Stubborn.√ short - Dave is very short.√ thin - Quinn is very thin.√ silly - Nathaniel is very silly.√ scared easily - Tyce get's scared easily.√

Pattern 1: like Pattern 2: as Examples Examples Similes are a way to compare two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’. For example, if I want to say that somebody //swims well//, I can say they //swim like a fish// because fish swim well. There are two basic patterns that you can use. verb + like + noun She swims like a fish. He looks like an ogre. She plays like a pro. He walks like a duck. She acts like a fool. as + adjective + as + noun He is as tall as a giant. She is as fast as a rocket. He is as graceful as a swan. She is as sneaky as a fox. He is as quiet as a mouse. How could I say that somebody: runs - Fast he is as fast is a cheater.√ is pretty - She is as pretty as a rose.√ jumps well - He jumps as he thinks he's a pro.√ is strong - He is as strong as a weight lifter.√ How could I say that something: is hard - he is as hard as a rock.√ feels soft - she is as soft as a marsmlow.√ is sweet She is as sweet as a loolie.√ feels rough Korbon feels as rough as a tooth brush.√ is heavy He is as heavy as a rock.√ sounds noisy He sounds like a noisy rodio.√ is light He is a light as a feather.√